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Review:Secret Santa :) says:
Hehehe! I really enjoyed reading this! A very humourous and completely unique story! I have never come across a story about a sock before, let alone one narrated by the sock itself!

I really liked the tone of the sock, it was nice that you managed to characterise the sock so well just by the way it 'talked'. I loved the ending, when he got chucked into the bin, and still thought Harry would come back. I loved how you managed to have a story to tell as well, you gradually built up the story behind the sock. It was nice to see Harry Potter and Lily turn up in the story! and Dobby as well.

The only crit I have is the grammar/formatting. You've ended a lot, a lot of lines with a comma, and then having a new paragraph with the dialogue. For example, "and she pointed at me,

"Yuck! What’s a smelly old sock doing on a velvet cushion like that?.. etc.

Although you are supposed to start new text in a new line, you don't actually need to write it like that. A better way to write it would just be to connect the two in one sentence - because, they are actually one sentence. I hope that made sense!

Anyway, I did enjoy this, it's such a unique idea, and this was definitely a very original fic. :)

♥ secret santa

Author's Response: Hi Secret Santa! Wow, I didn't see these reviews until now! (blind me!). Thanks so, so much, it was a great surprise!

This story was really just the figment of a bored mind, so the grammar probably isn't particularly great...but I worryingly think that I do what you've described rather too often! I always thought 'new speaker new line.' But I'll read up on that and revise it!

I never thought I'd be able to characterise a sock, but somehow it...worked! I could even hear (his/her?) annoying, whiny voice in the back of my head!

I'm glad it was unique! thanks again,

LWG x

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