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Review:Shhhh...Secret Santa returned! says:
Hello!

Chapter three was just as good, if not better than the previous chapters. I'm really starting to love this white world, as horrible as it sounds [I wouldn't last more than a day alone with no one to talk to]. And Skeleton's Woods? Creepy! Definitely gave me the creeps! Those souls of people? Only thing I could think of were dementors. Which gave me more creeps. To think that they life in the woods, not able to escape because they have living bodies...creepy, but really creative to throw in!

Beth, I tend to think to, is mildly creepy. Seems she's been there a long time, though it's sort of confusing. I sort of figured, just because she had so many answers to weird questions that she had cancer. But the fact that she lived until she was 20, though she was still 8? Totally bizarre! But I love it all the same!

A few things here, I have to point out:

"There was definitely something wrong here and it agitate me." ~agitated me -past tense not present

"I looked passed the many heads on my right and saw the Hogwarts Express, its scarlet engine gleaming like a beacon against the dark stone walls behind it." ~Instead of passed, past.

"Then again, Luna had always been independent, and Iím not sure even if I hadnít died that I would be able to control her." ~To keep it in past tense, I think you mean 'I would have been able'

But past those, honestly, this was an amazing chapter! This white world never ceases to amaze me! I am excited to move onto the next chapter!

~Secret Santa

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