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Review:Your Ravenclaw Secret Santa says:
I think the song you choose goes perfectly with the theme and emotions of the story. I thought the song quotes were well placed with the exception of the 4th one, I was expecting him to be confronting Rose immediately after that line, as that's what had happened with the 3 previous ones (the song quotes directly reflected Scorpius' actions). So my suggestion would be moving the 4th song quote to after "Now my friends are trying to calm me down; trying to prevent me from embarrassing myself any more than I already have."
That's the only suggestion I can think of. Otherwise I think you captured someone coming to terms with the end of a relationship perfectly. I liked how you kept Rose's reasoning a mystery for the reader, so we can guess them for ourselves. Perhaps you'd consider a companion type piece detailing either the break up or the aftermath for Rose? I'd read it!
Poor Scorpius, you really pull at the readers' heartstrings with this piece. I just want to give him a hug and tell him it'll be okay!

Your Secret Santa

Author's Response: I hadn't thought of the placement of the 4th quote so much before, but I definitely see what you mean.
Yay! You understood why I didn't reveal the reason for their break up. :D I shall definitely consider writing a related/companion story to this, yes.
Thank you for a lovely review! Hugs for Scorpius!

-Sophia


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