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Review:The Christmas Fairy says:
Merry Christmas, Naida! The Fairy has returned with part 2 of your Secret Santa gift, to review And I Never Looked Back!

This is a very intriguing idea - Malfoy leaving home and starting a new life with a new identity. The Fairy enjoyed this first chapter, and is looking forward to reading more!

Draco's confusion, and the maelstrom of conflicting emotions he feels in the aftermath of the battle, are very nicely expressed, as is his growing clarity.

The Fairy thinks that there are some small issues that a clean-up read would easily fix. You slipped between present and past tense on occasion (for instance, paragraph 3 starts 'I walked' and paragraph 4 includes 'are undergoing trial'), and the timeline was a little muddled - Draco starts the chapter walking through the castle, and then he is lying in the grass without explanation of how he got there.

But, these are simple things to correct, and The Fairy is very happy to move on to the first chapter proper!

Author's Response: I AM HERE AT LAST.

Thank you sooo much! I'm really glad you liked the prologue. It was one of the rare chapters I actually managed to write all in one go and post it on the same day, soo, I didn't do much editing (hence the errors-shall fix those ^_^) I love writing angst and emotions, (couldn't you tell :P) so I'm glad you loed that. And as I said before, I will take a look at the timeline and those errors!

-Naida

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