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Review:winky the house elf says:
eek such a lovely chapter!

now that you've filled out the characters a bit more and everything the story is starting to build up nicely. :) i like how Hugo has Ron's sleeping habits; I could definitely see that happening! And the treehouse concept is so, so cute. it definitely holds lots of opportunities for exciting stories :D and lol the rite of entrance! i can totally remember doing things like that when i was little.

you mentioned in your author's note that you rambled a bit, and admittedly the flashbacks seemed kind of drawn out to me. if you want to end the chapter at a later place, you could end it after

"Let's go." We ran straight into the wood without looking back.

that's just my suggestion though :P feel free to disregard it.

anyways, i feel like you established lily's character pretty well in this chapter. i'm definitely enjoying this story! :3

--winky

Author's Response: Thanks!

Ooh that's good, and I love writing Hugo ;) he's such a half-and-half person! I'm glad you like the treehouse, not too cheesy I hope! Yeah, I'm trying to make it as believable as I can!

Yes, I definitely need to edit that! They were far too drawn-out to get the point across, and I think that's a great suggestion! I'll see how it could work :)

Thanks :)

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