|Review:||The Last Marauder says:|
Hi there, I am here with your requested review!
What can I say? The spelling, grammar and punctuation were perfect. The chapter flowed so well. I thought you captured Ginny so well too, especially the hurt she felt at being left behind by Harry; how she is not all the different from Hermione when push came to shove. I thought that was a great vein for you to tap into, because you're right in what you said, Ginny gets left behind a lot, we will see that too in the final battle, her parents wanting her to go home. So in terms of characterisation you got Ginny spot on.
I loved how you revealed information about how Hogwarts school had changed, how Harry chose the lesser of two evils to keep Ginny safe by letting her return to Hogwarts instead of coming with them.
You also captured her anxiety over where Harry was very well. Your writing style is faultless really, you reveal so much in the words you chose to write with, over all the piece is beautifully written, perfectly written even.
I don't know what constructive criticism I can give you, the only thing that struck me was that Ginny was 16, would she really be thinking about marriage and having children at 16?? But that's all I could think of, maybe some girls do think of marriage at the age of 16, I don't know! I am only saying this because I remember in the book that Harry, aged 16, commented how "It's not like we're going to end up married or anything" when thinking about his relationship with Ginny. But that's only a little thing, and I'm only saying it for the sake of giving some sort of constructive criticism.
Overall, I liked this a lot. I love the banner, and the amazing picture at the start of this chapter. I think you've used the Coldplay lyrics very well (Paradise is such a good song). All I can say is, I just can't wait to read the next chapter!
Author's Response: Oh, what a lovely long and thorough review! These are always the kind I hope I'll get :)
I'm glad you liked the way I used the lyrics to inspire this little moment in Ginny's life, and I'm also happy to see that you were pleased with her characterization. I imagine that she could have been in Hermione's place if Hermione had not existed and her brothers had not been so protective of her, as she certainly possesses her own skill as a witch. It must have been frustrating for her to be left behind to wonder, and I tried to capture that here.
Well, being a girl, I can say that many girls I know dreamed of their perfect wedding gown, wedding ceremony, and dream house just as easily as they dreamed of the perfect man they wanted to meet one day (preferably in a scene straight out of a romantic comedy). I didn't do much thinking about it as a little girl, but I imagined that Ginny would have a bit of time to daydream at home with all those brothers playing without her, let alone her time locked up in Hogwarts Castle. I used the idea of her perfect future as a way of letting her escape from the depressing present day. I mean, just because Harry wasn't thinking a whole lot about it (he was a bit busy!) doesn't mean she never did, you know?
Thanks for taking the time to read and review! :)