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Review:Pretense Of Perfection says:
This is an incredibly powerful and emotional chapter, and it is very well executed. I have to applaud you for this.

I honestly think Elsa's thoughts of turning to the Dark Arts do reflect her differences from her family, just as much as it reflects her differences from her friends. I think even with a non-pureblood/Death Eater family and a different upbringing, it's only logical for her to think of looking to dark magic for the answer to her father's death. In all honesy, who in this world that has lost someone hasn't thought about the "what if there was a way to bring them back..." Being in the world of magic I can imagine the desire would be that much stronger, because you see magical things happen everyday, so who's to say that at some point in history someone wasn't brought back from the dead? I'm sure in Sirius' darker moments he thought of ways to try and bring James and Lily back, just like any normal person would.

Anyways, I'm ranting. Again, I commend you for the powerful and stirring emotions this chapter evokes, I think you executed Evander's death brilliantly. Elsa's pain and emotions are so raw and real, that the reader themselves feels some of them. Your use of similies and hyperboles is amazing as well, and really makes your work stand out.

I do just have one things I want to comment on, which you probably already know, is that since the room of requirement wasn't on the Marauder's Map, the Marauders probably didn't know about it. Obviously some instances require poetic license, but I just thought I'd point that out in case you weren't aware!

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