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Review:EverDiggory says:
Darn,I was really anxiously awaiting to read his reply...:3

Anyways,onto the important stuff...

Your strong point in this one-shot was details and very strong emotions. The details you included created a very clear and distinguished picture,which is amazing and fantastic. Also, the flow of your words,and choice of words made it somewhat hypnotic,and soothing. The emotions,were absolutely brilliant. You didn't make it painstakingly obvious like some authors. You used words to show the emotions. You didn't just say "he was sad,angry,etc..." You went beyond that and manipulated your words to get that point across. That was mind blowing and just brilliant. I am definitely impressed with that!

weak points"

Forgive me,but there aren't many weak points(: which is good,but therefor I'm giving you nothing to work on,so I'll be insanely picky...
I really really would have liked to see some flashback of a sort...maybe like when he saw her hand writing,describe how he had the same reaction to her previous letters,or maybe how more of the stuff she said brought back even more memories.

Goodness,I'm sorry,but I'm reaching now. This was so fantastic,I'm struggling to find something wrong!

All together,this was a beautiful magnificent work. This is definitely something you should be proud of. I really enjoyed this,and I was overwhelmed by the emotion that came from it. I could probably read this over and over and still feel the emotions as strongly as I did the previous time. Amazing job! 10/10

Author's Response: Hey! I'm glad you enjoyed the piece and that you were kind enough to leave me this nice, in-depth review :)

I suppose I could have included a flashback, yes, and that might have been a nice touch. I didn't want the piece to drag on forever, since the lack of action tends to deter some readers. Maybe I'll keep your suggestion in mind next time I write something similar to this.

I'm so pleased and flattered by your compliments! I did try to focus on making the emotion obvious here, and I'm glad that it came through and felt very real to you.

Thanks for the swap! :)

academica


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