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Review:Beeezie says:
Hey! At long last, I am here to review your story! (Sorry - life has been really crazy lately.)

I actually wouldn't say you're less than average as a writer at all! Yes, there are definitely points that you could work on - while I think that Caitie has a very strong narrative voice, there were points where I wished you'd added some more description of the scene and her surroundings into it, and I definitely felt like there were a few points where you fell into some stereotypes/cliches (her roommate taking two hours, her eating everything and never gaining a pound - yes, both things do happen in the real world, but they are a little extreme, and you want to be careful how you present extremes when they're cliched like that). However, overall, I think that you did a great job with this, especially for your first fic ever! (And, might I say again, I am so beyond happy that it was my challenge that started you writing fanfiction!)

This was a really solid job. :)

Author's Response: That's fine!
Thank you, that is such a compliment :)
I think someone else mentioned the scenery description and so on as well, so I'll definitely /try/ to include some of that!
Hmm you're right about the cliche thing, although I actually got that from my friend, well two of my friends, so I do suppose it is a bit much together and in this sort of place where cliches are rampant :o
Thanks so much :)

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