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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
Hello Ty! I'm here for the review exchange. :)

First off, I must admit this is my first Victoire story! I think the best part about Next Gen fics is the freedom you have with their characterizations. You can get away with practically anything and no one can say you're out-of-character because no one knows much about these Next Gen kids.

It seems quite unfortunate that all of the bad news Victoire receives comes from Long Eared Owls. It makes it rather predictable then that she didn't get accepted to BIMAS. But I suppose that was intentional, otherwise, why else would you focus on it? Speaking of BIMAS, I really like the graphic. It gave it a bit more of an official feel to it. I did notice that you were missing a word in the first sentence, though. "We appreciate your interest the British Institute of Magical Arts and Studies." You should have the word 'in' between interest and the.

I know in canon, there is no evidence of any continued education so it's certainly interesting to see the presence of BIMAS. I suppose a lot has probably changed since the Trio was at Hogwarts and anything is possible.

I really feel for Victoire in this chapter. Teddy left to pursue his travels - and he got accepted to BIMAS straight away - and Sara is leaving her for a job in Brazil. Victoire must feel like such a failure, she has no definite plans for her future, except perhaps to live in her parents basement until she's 30. It made me sad when she said that people thought she only got the Head Girl title because of her last name. Being Head Girl should never be about popularity and if that's the case, whoever is in charge has no consideration about what's best for the school. Maybe that's just me being hopeful that Victoire was chosen because she was the most ideal candidate and I would hope she didn't get anywhere just because of her last name. I feel like, to me, that would add to my disappointment in myself if I was Victoire that I am not actually capable of being Head Girl.

I really like Sara in this chapter though. She's definitely very level-headed and seems to balance Victoire out. I hope we get to hear more from her despite her relocation to Brazil!

I don't know why, but when you were describing the scene where Sara and Victoire are packing up their belongings, this line really stood out to me: "items whose original ownership had long since been forgotten." It's something very similar, but to me, it holds a lot of weight. It's kind of a reminder of the past seven years and the friendship that those two have created. I think it says a lot about them.

I'm very curious about Victoire's condition, though I get sort of a slight understanding by McGonagall's description of 'hysterics.' I feel by not really describing it, you make your readers curious enough to want to continue reading it, which is a good thing!

I am also very pleased at how well-written your story is. It's very frustrating to come across stories that have claimed to be edited and I find so many mistakes that it seems impossible that someone with a basic understanding of grammar and mechanics could have possibly looked at the story. Well-written fics make me happy!

I'm not sure if I'll get to another chapter today, but expect a few more reviews from me before the end of the year! I'm definitely interested enough to continue and see how our poor Victoire fares next with graduation and Sara's departure. Nicely done! :)

Author's Response: Hi!

Yeah, Next Gen is great that way. I love the relative freedom it gives for the story and characters. I do push the boundaries a little with the new institution, but I figure there was a great deal about the wizarding world that did not directly pertain to Harry's experience so why not. I'm glad you like the graphic. I had to give up the chapter image for it because you're only allowed one pic per chapter, but I liked the feel of the formal letter confirming what you knew was coming. And thanks for the catch on the typo, I'll add that to my list of edits.

The administration did have good reason for making Vic Head Girl, but because she has the name, there are people more than willing to credit it rather than her and she notices.

That line was actually very deliberate so I'm super excited you mentioned it! Life is changing for them both. That solidness and balance will not be such a constant anymore.

Thank you so much for the awesome comments! I'm actually in awe of the length of your review. I think I'm going to have to step up my game on your remaining chapters :)

Take care!
~Ty


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