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Review:Secret Santa says:
That smile I had during the last chapter of this? Totally did not leave my face for one second while reading this.

God, you have this way with characters. I have mentioned it before but you manage to give us so much with so little. You don't give us a character's entire life story, you just dive in and it's like I have known the characters for years. It's all so familiar which is insane because I have only been reading your work for a few days (a fact that I hate because I should have been reading it from the day it was posted!). You don't overwhelm us with information about your characters, you just take us into their lives and let us experience it.

You have truly mastered the art of 'show, don't tell'. I'm so jealous. I swear, once this SS is over, I am going to read over your stuff again to see just how you do it.

I loved this line: Roxanne and James had discovered over the past month how much they really liked breaking the rules. It sort of sets the entire premise for the whole story and I just loved it.

You also have this way with your sentence. I have mentioned it before, but you really do. They flow on from one another in a way that I wish I could do. And your paragraphs are just perfect. Again, it might sound like a tiny thing but you have no idea how much they add to your story. The tone comes across so clearly.

Roxanne and James were hilarious in this. I get the feeling that they're good mates, tease each other but still love one another and are really good at working with each other. I love how they used the power of suggestion to those Slytherins. Stroke of genius! It was a brilliant prank and the first one I have read that didn't involve a lot of mayhem. Very clever and I applaud you for it!

I hope you continue with this! I loved this little insight into Roxanne and James and it's just such a fun story to read that I can easily see myself staying up into the early hours of the mornings, reading it. Yes, it is one of those stories!

:)

Author's Response: Okay, so for a second I thought the smile totally DID leave your face for this, and I had a moment of, "Oh my god, why? What did I do? I didn't think it was very depressing or bad!" Then my brain caught up, and I breathed again.

I'm especially glad that you're commenting on the mechanics, because I am a mechanics freak. I love the mechanics. I live for the mechanics. I was an English/Psych major, and the mechanics were like my bread and butter. I really care so much about them, so to have you comment on them so favorably makes me very happy!

I'm definitely going to continue with this! My only difficulty is my large number of WIPs. That's not a problem in terms of writing the chapters, because I always have a pretty sizable backlog that I need to upload (I literally always have something in the queue). It's just about the queue and validation. It's been over two months and 19 new chapters validated since my last very dumb mistake, so I'm hoping that the powers that be decide to grant me TA status at some point. Then I could update all of my stories regularly. Yay.

Thank you so much for this. I'm having a really terrible day, and this just brightened it up. You have no idea. You are a lovely secret santa. ♥


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