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Review:Beeezie says:
I meant to read this ages and ages ago. I bookmarked it in my to-read folder. Then I forgot about it until just now. Fail on my part.

Anyway! I really, really liked this. I could absolutely tell that you were talking about Draco and Pansy, and I really liked the way you portrayed them. I think that for Pansy in particular, we never really got a real sense of who she was as a person in the books - we got a sense of who she was as a bully, but not really as a person. You definitely humanized her here, and you actually made me sympathize with her (something I didn't think was possible!).

My only criticism is that I felt like their dialogue was a little too formal at times for the situation. Other than that, this was lovely and I will definitely be adding it to my favorites! :)

Author's Response: Aw, well at least you finally remembered and came around to read it. That's what really matters.

I am really glad you liked it though. I am definitely very happy with this one-shot. I figured Draco would be obvious, but I honestly didn't think Pansy was obvious until I put in the bit where she talks about herself and I think that's really what gives it away. I agree that we never really got to know her in the books, and what we did know certainly didn't portray her in a very good light. I think my goal was to humanize her and make people pity her even though normally they wouldn't. I just sort of feel bad for Pansy because everyone hates her.

You thought the dialogue was too formal? Really? Well, that's new to me. I suppose that's possible though. I think I may have been a bit formal with the whole story and of course it drifted into the dialogue. Also, I think in the past scenes, the moment Draco starts the conversation saying he doesn't want to be with her anymore, she slowly starts stepping back, emotionally, from him to the point where she's pushing him away, and I think the formality could also have something to do with that, if that makes sense. From the moment the conversation starts, she sort of ices up, and pulls away; detaches herself. I don't know. I hope that made some sense.

Thank you so much for the review! It was an exciting surprise to look at my author page and see a raised review count that I was not expecting.

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