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Review:academica says:
Hey! Here from review tag! :)

So both this chapter and your author's notes seemed really rambly, kind of like a kid who's had a lot of soda and candy all within the expanse of a few hours. In the future, I would recommend that you keep yourself to one author's note and try to keep it as succinct and short as possible. For example, you don't need to tell us about all the things you've been busy doing that have kept you from updating -- we all have real lives too and we understand when people can't update right away :) However, it was nice for you to thank the people who favorited your story. I'm sure they'll appreciate the mention.

As for the story, I just think you need to slow down a little bit. The action seemed to progress really, really fast, from the main character's anticipation of meeting up with Nott to their interaction and then on to the aftermath. I don't really understand her anger -- again, I wish you had shown me how she felt rather than have her actually state that she's upset. I mean, he kind of came up on her out of nowhere, but he didn't really do anything, and she got away kind of easily, so I don't see why she should be "the maddest she's ever been". The emotion just doesn't seem consistent to me, like she and her roommate have this overblown anger, but she's really afraid of him, but she can make jokes about him in her head. Do you see what I'm saying? It just seems a bit disjointed.

Now, I couldn't make this review totally doom and gloom, so I do need to comment that I think your main character has a lot of potential. For example, it's really interesting that she tutors younger students. I think it would be better if you focused on that in a future chapter or two to deepen her characterization and show that she's not all scatter-brained. It would also provide many opportunities for humorous moments, with students asking silly questions and whatnot.

Hope this helps! :)

academica

Author's Response: Thanks, I appreciate the honest review :)
I kinda did just sit down and spew this out because I was freaking out about the challenge deadline - which I ended up missing anyway. I also think that when I wrote this I just sort of wrote it in the way that I talk (I ramble, obviously) and I wasn't really thinking about writing well, if you get what I mean? I'll watch that in the future!

The story went really fast because I was trying to get to the main part for the challenge, but as I said, I missed that.

I actually reread the chapter and you're right, it makes absolutely no sense whatsoever. I think I'll go back and rewrite the chapter, much more calmly this time too.

Thanks for the pointers on what to do in future chapters, I'll try and focus on that sort of thing :)

This was really helpful, thank you :)


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