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Review:academica says:
Hey! Turning up at last to review your entry :)

So I was crazy excited to read this, because I think Slughorn is really interesting, particularly during the final battle when he's faced with the dilemma of staying true to Slytherin and doing what's right, having courage more reminiscent of a Gryffindor. And you did SO WELL with his characterization, drawing upon the precise ideas I'd hoped to see in this entry.

I loved the beginning, your hearkening back to Slughorn's penchant for his "shelf" of star students. It was so interesting to watch him as he interacted with the Death Eaters, thinking about what failures they'd turned out to be in the end. The touch of having the Death Eaters not wear their masks because they thought the victory was certain was great as well.

I also really liked the switching between Slughorn's memories and the present day. His anguish over being at all connected with Tom Riddle is readily apparent, and I liked how he made a few references to Lily, one of his most talented and most loved pupils. It was nice to see those feelings transfer to Harry as well. Similarly, it was neat to see your take on why he left Hogwarts. I'd always assumed that it was out of shame disguised as retirement, but it's interesting to see him forced out of his job and into the role of a conspirator here.

More than anything, I liked the progression you've built into Slughorn's character. I was really proud to see him take to the stone wall and attack his former students in pursuit of the good, and to see him attempt to face Voldemort at the end. After all of those comparisons to the other teachers, especially McGonagall, he finally found a niche of his own.

Very well done! This was a delight to read. I'm so glad you entered, and I hope you enjoying writing for the challenge. The results should be out shortly after Christmastime, most likely via blog post.

Amanda

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing and I'm so glad that you think I did well with his characterization as I had problems with it in the beginning. He was never really brought into the spotlight in the books but there was still enough there that the readers got a good impression of his personality.

I'm so glad that you liked the beginning- I thought that it was a good way to both establish his character and lead into his role in the final battle. And because he was always so proud of his "star students", I thought that his reactions to watching those same students be on the "evil" side would be very interesting to explore- I'm glad that you thought so as well. I'm also glad that you liked the changes between past and present- I thought that it would be a good way to explore his reactions during the battle.

I'm so glad that you enjoyed reading this and I did have a lot of fun writing this story. Thanks for making this challenge!


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