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Review:accioHPFF says:

This was a great story- the plot was so unique, and I loved the way you built up character.

I like the way that Pettigrew was a spy, taking advantage to his animagus form being a small rat. Basing a story around that was good. :)

The conversation between Bellatrix and Narcissa was also really good! You thought of some really interesting topics for them to speak about- and it was so realistic.


The one piece of advice I can think to give you is that you should tighten up the idea at the end. I assume that Pettigrew is being tortured/attacked by various curses? You could rewrite that, or add a sentence, to make it clearer.

Great story! :) Happy Birthday, again!

-accioHPFF! :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's lovely of you to have left a review and I really appreciate that you did. :D

I can't remember how I came up with the spy idea, but it makes sense that he would use his animagus powers in that way. While at Hogwarts, the Marauders used his small size and quickness to operate the Whomping Willow, so he should be able to use those same abilities as a spy - it would also explain why he was able to build up so much trust for both the Marauders and Dumbledore. Not that he was planning on becoming a turncoat from the beginning (I kind of hate it when writers make him like that), but instead finding a way of becoming useful, so useful as to be "needed" rather than being that hanger on of James and Sirius.

That ending still bothers me, too! I know what I want to have happen, but getting it to work without having to up the rating is what's giving me trouble. I'll give it another look and hopefully I'll be able to flesh it out a little better - it might only need a couple of carefully placed words to do the trick. :) Thanks very much!

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