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Review:Secret Santa says:
Gosh, Teddy is absolutely perfect in this. Sorry to continue my gushing from earlier about him but he's perfect.

You have his dialogue perfect, down to the way that he pronounces things. And the things he gets excited about. It's the little things, like how he had to carve six pumpkins before he had enough. Those little details add so much to this story and I can tell you have really thought it through!

Another little detail is how Andromeda has stopped wearing earrings. It's another little thing that adds so much, you know? It shows her age and her maturity and it is just another layer to her character. Such a small thing but it adds so much. I love it.

God, Harry is exactly how I pictured him to be as godfather. And it was interesting how Andromeda had her reservations at the start. Of course she would have. She barely knows him. And I think that she would have always felt a bit detached from the Weasleys. You really thought her character through and it's definite food for thought.

That small line about Molly made me smile. Again with the little things!

I got this sense of awkwardness with Narcissa. Uneasiness, even. And regret. God, how do you do it? How do you make me feel so many things while I'm reading your writing? No, tell me. Please. I wish I could do it!

This line: "I believe you." Narcissa smiled faintly, and Andromeda added, "I just don't care." God that is just... that is so profound. And so true. I was expecting Andromeda to not believe Narcissa but the fact she does and doesn't care speaks volumes about her relationship with Narcissa. That's so sad.

The interaction with Narcissa and Andromeda was so intense. It started out as aloofness, then hostility and then it built up into anger. And I loved that. That's so true of how people interact in day to day life. It's only when you build up to anger that the true feelings come out. And that's what you had here.

I also get this sense of how Andromeda is just fed up with it all. She just doesn't care. It's too much of a burden for her and I like that. A lot. It's different to anything I have ever read, but now that I think about it, it's so true. I can easily see her reacting in this exact manner if it ever happened to her. She is older and has more important things to worry about, as you mention in the last line.

You really make me think, you know that?

Author's Response: Okay, I keep wanting to make a heart with the thing that's on the same key as the comma and a 3, but I know from experience that the review response form doesn't like that. So I keep stopping myself at the last minute.

I'm really glad you appreciated all the little details! I really love adding in those things, because I know that when I'm reading it's always the little things that really make the story pop and come to life, you know? It's all about the details. The earrings bit, I admit, was based on personal experience - anyone who's spent any time with small children knows that it's a very bad idea to wear anything they can yank out. :P

I'm so glad that I make you think! I really try to introduce that into a lot of my writing, especially in stories like this and Ghost in the Machine. There are so many sides to every story, and often there's not one person who's clearly right or wrong. It's often about the shades of grey, and I really wanted to portray that here. It seems like I succeeded. Yay!

Thank you. So much. You make my day awesome and special.


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