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Review:Secret Santa says:
Hello :)

This story was tragically beautiful! I could tell there was an edge to this story, one of regret...of sadness, but I wasn't really sure where it was coming from until the end, which just added to the beauty. And before I go on to more likes, I'm going to point out a couple things I noticed that you may want to look at.

"He was resentful that he had been saved by the very people he had sworn to hate. I suppose that's one thing we have in common. Father thinks pure-bloods are as good as royalty, the best of the best." ~I'm a bit confused here. I don't know what exactly Scorpius is suggesting he has in common with his father...

"So you must be wondering how Rose humiliated me. I had stolen something of hers before a transfiguration lesson, when her back was turned." ~You may want the word 'well' at the start of the second sentence. Just so it's easier to tell he's starting to tell the story.

But other than those few things, I absolutely loved this story! My first complement has to be that this is written from Scorpius' point of view! I can honestly say I have not found a Rose/Scorpius stories from his point of view, but I loved it. You seem to have a really good understanding of Scorpius as a character, and it makes this story easy to read.

Also, the way you have this story written, I didn't realize Rose was going to die until that short passage before the last flashback, about the time turner. And even then, I didn't want to believe she'd die by Draco's hand. Even though I knew. But honestly, it was beautiful! The description, the characterization, and the plot...wonderful! Great Job!

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