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Review:Secret Santa *hands you a candy cane* says:
*SINGS* Who can it be now? Who can it be now? Writing up this review? Who can it be now? Who can it be now? Typing up this review? Well, hello there! It's me again! Your Secret Santa! I hope your enjoying your treats! :D

Woah! Let's start with that. Woah! This was amazing. Seriously! How can you think your stories aren't interesting? I was interested throughout the whole chapter. What a stroke of genius! To use the barista's point of view (sorta) throughout the whole thing. Shall it be his point of view in later chapters as well or will we hear from Molly? I assume the girl was Molly because the story is about her afterall.

I find it very original that it's in a coffee shop, the barista is the one that's going to show us his vision of her and everyone around them. I really liked that! The transition you make analyzing each person was wonderful. It really gave us a good look into a coffee shop. Plus, I donít drink coffee but I frequently visit Starbucks so I understood the images. However, without visiting Starbucks I would have seen everything that you laid out for us as well. You're excellent at pinpointing the tiniest bit of detail so we can delve into the location of the story in our minds or in our rooms and say 'I see Molly, I see this man with his chin propped up on one hand, I can hear the tinkling of coins as she rummages in her pocket for them.'

How wonderful!

The ending captivated me:

The young man's clear green eyes, once so hollow and empty are now bright, filled with curiosity as he stares at the door the young woman exited through moments ago.

What a transition just by seeing Molly. It's like she brings a small light into the world of others. The barista clearly enjoys her company and this man obviously wants to enjoy her company. Or maybe not, maybe he's just drawn in by her beauty. That's the wonderful mystery of this chapter, you have laid it out so I'm thinking 'Is this about an actual relationship or is it not? Is it just one from afar or is it something more?' I really can't wait to find out though.

So, here's my question:
What made you write from the view of the barista and what gave you that idea?

Secret Santa outtt! :D

Author's Response: Is that a rhetorical question? Of course I'm enjoying my treats!

I was scared with this one because it just seems so slow and descriptive so you have no idea how much of a relief it is for a reader to tell me that they enjoy this. I absolutely love writing this and it's so nice that you liked reading it!

The barista was not actually planned. It was originally supposed to be from the young man's POV but I just started writing about the barista and then his character took a life of its own. I'm glad you think that he works! You won't see any chapters from the young man's POV, nor Molly's. I have thought long and hard about it and I'm going to keep it from the barista's POV. Not to worry, you will know what happens to the young man and Molly, though!

Oh, wow. I don't even know how to respond to that. To think that you can actually see what I'm trying to ask you to see is just... phenomenal. I'm absolutely floored by that. Thank you, thank you, thank you! I try so hard with detail and it's just so humbling when someone tells me that they think it works.

The relationship will most definitely progress throughout the chapters. There is a time lapse in between each chapter and I suppose I wanted to see how a relationship is viewed from another person's POV.

Answer to your question: As I said before, the barista was not actually planned! I found myself writing the first part of this story and I wanted to describe the coffee shop. I started writing about the barista and I was initially going to make a transition from the barista to the young man or perhaps have the young man watching the barista, but my fingers thought differently and, before I knew it, I had plotted out an entire character for the barista. I've gotten his entire life story written out in a document, it has more detail than I will ever need but I have really worked hard on his character and I really do love writing him. The reader will never know his entire story but I hope that I can add in small details that make you appreciate him for the man he is.

Thank you so much for your review! So, so, so much!

Joop.


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