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Review:The Christmas Fairy says:
Hello, Naida! Merry Christmas! This is your very own Christmas Fairy speaking:-)

I love Harry and Ginny fics, so I am on home turf with Haunted, and I enjoyed reading it very much. I'm not familiar with Taylor Swift - she isn't as well known where I am from (a tiny hint for you there!), but the lyrics fitted your subject matter very nicely.

There was a lot to like here. I thought you had some lovely descriptions. I especially liked the passage about the sun setting. Your diction there was lovely, mirroring Ginny's emotions, as it was when discussing how she imagined Harry's presence all the time.

Ginny's emotional state throughout the story was nicely judged. You painted a lovely portrait of heartbreak. I felt her pain, and her vacillation between hope that he'll come back and desolation that he left at all rang true. I thought the letter she wrote was a lovely touch.

There are some improvements I think you could make:

I'm not sure that the characterisation is quite perfect throughout. It was a little jarring to describe Harry as unfeeling and emotionless - I've always felt that he left her out of love, and that Ginny knew that, even though she thought it was a stupid thing to do, but perhaps that's just my reading.

I felt that 'stature' was an odd choice of word in the sentence 'Ginny's stature gradually fell apart'. I wonder if 'composure' might work better?

And finally, I thought that perhaps the ending could be improved. It feels a bit abrupt. I liked that Ginny got hold of herself - this is a Ginny that I recognise, but I think something simple, like her going out the face the day, a Harry-free future, would have tied it up beautifully.

All-in-all - a well written and heartfelt piece that I enjoyed reading.

Author's Response: Eeeek, thank you! -insert heart here- This is my very first fic, so to be honest, I pretty much hate it xD I only leave it up for memory's sake, so all these compliments are amazing.

When I wrote this, I did like Harry/Ginny, though now I don't like the ship much :P Wow, it's amazing for me to read this and realize how much I've changed. I still love this song though, so I'm glad you thought it was fitting.

No, don't tell me that this is balanced. Tell me that this is over dramatic and Ginny needs to get a life and that the plot and characters suck. YOU ARE WAY TOO SWEET, CHRISTMAS FAIRY. Haha, thank you, though -insert another heart here- It is nice to hear that you liked the descriptions in this!

Thank you for suggesting all those improvements! Since I am a fairly honest person, I can tell you that I probably won't be editing this particular story, but I will DEFINITELY keep them in mind for any future stories I write. This was one of the sweetest and most thought out reviews I have ever received so thank you!!

And us Claws are the best xD

Happy Holidays to you, dear Christmas Fairy, and thank you.

-Naida



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