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Review:Woodrow Rynne says:
Hey there! :D Sorry for the little late review; I had trouble signing in. :P

Anyway, this was wonderful! To write Phineas' point of view is a very courageous thing indeed, and just let me say that you pulled it off very well!

Characterisation was great- his snarky, arrogant attitude came out quite nicely, but you also managed to show a deeper side to it- how he hated existing as a portrait- how he longed for his adventurous life as an ...well, alive man.

That Peeves twist was fantastic and really original- I couldn't help giggling at the thought of Peeves as his assistant, and that he had been a responsible guy in his life. That's quite mind-boggling, isn't it? :P

I think you portrayed Dumbledore really well too. His persuasion powers are something nobody can emulate, because honestly, he doesn't have to /say/ anything, yet just his eyes make even the most stubborn (like Phineas) melt. :P

One point of critique, though- the formatting is a little messy, so that make it just teeny weeny bit difficult to read. Also, even though this was a brilliant one-shot, I felt as if something was missing. I think it was because you merely /told/ us how Phineas felt, rather than /showed/. Maybe if you could expand it a little more, (with more dialogue)...

I'm merely saying because I would love to read more :P However, this is your story, so..

And it is really good as it is. The description didn't distract from the story, rather added to the pleasantness of this read. And that's the best part about your writing. Some authors use so much description that it's difficult to keep reading, but you use it naturally and subtly, and I love that.

All in all, great writing, and keep it up! :D
Vanya

PS- I know I haven't read your challenge entry yet, but I will, I assure you XP. I didn't want to review it through tag, that's all. :P

Author's Response: Hey!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!!

I'm glad you think I pulled it off well, I was afraid I hadn't done justice to Phineas but your review has eased my worries (yours and some other reviews too :D)

I am also flattered that you find the Peeves thing fantastic, it was just a spur-on-the-moment decision I made on including him, and glad it turned out well! It sure is mind-boggling though :D

*sighs with relief and gratitude* I portrayed Dumbledore "really well"? OMG thank you! you don't know how happy you've made me! it took me a lot of rewrites and edits to finally think that I'd got him satisfactorily right (Dumbledore is a very hard character to pull off), and I'm so happy my hard work kinda paid off :)

Oh the formatting is messy? I never quite noticed that, it's been some time since the story has been up! I'll re-read and do the edits once I'm free from exams, thanks for pointing it out!

Well I actually wanted it to be more of a descriptive rather than a dialogue-oriented fic, because it was a portrait after all, but I'll see what I can do. I am flattered again to know you'd like to read more (though my muse is on vacation at the moment I'm afraid), but Thank you for the comments :)

Also nice to know that the description was moderate and that you didn't find it annoying or distracting.

"And that's the best part about your writing. Some authors use so much description that it's difficult to keep reading, but you use it naturally and subtly, and I love that." -- OMG I'm over the moon. thank you!!

You have no idea how happy and proud you've made me after your wonderful review!! Thanks a lottt!! :D And no problem about the challenge entry review, take your time!! :) {I'm afraid it's not as good though, but oh well}!

Thanks again!



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