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Review:Cassius Alcinder says:
It's me from the forums here with you review!

First of all I have to compliment the depth of your character development. All the characters are super flawed and I'm not really sure who, if anybody, to root for. It's pretty common to see Rose be an overachiever, but I definetley haven't seen her this nasty and calculating before. The rivalry between her and Dominique is great, and Dom just seems totally evil. Albus seems very interesting as well, and its believable that they would all turn out this way given the pressures and expectatiotns they would grow up with because of who their parents are.

The relationships between the Malfoy family are very interestng and beleivable as well. Since I'm not a fan of Draco, I enjoyed that you portrayed him so bitter and distant, its totaly accurate.

The investigation with the Aurors in this chapter was well executed, and it realy felt like watching a scene from law and order or that kind of show. Draco's mysterious disaperance lends some suspense that keeps the plot moving. It's also very interestng to see the complex and nuanced relationship between Scorpious and Elodie and the way that comes accross here. It wa sinteresting to see that she stuck up for him during the questioning, showing that she obviously still cares about him on some level despite rejecting him.

This is a very intersting story so far, and the last line about Rose was a great new twist and cliffhanger.

Author's Response: It's me with your belated review response! Sorry about that, I had exams and then my muse went mental so I've been writing pretty solidly. But here I am!

I really, really wanted to focus on character development in this story - lots of tension, lots of build up - after reading stories where people are in love or best friends after one or two chapters. Rose is horrible. She's ambitious and intelligent, yes, but she uses her talents in the worst possible way - she's a bully and she thinks that she can just walk all over people. I was so tempted by a bit of Alpius... who knows? It may creep in. I like them as friends. I'm starting to worry that Rose and Dominique will start to merge into the same person: they are both bitchy, controlling, apparently perfect. I want to leave Rose's development the latest, because the story because a lot more about her once stuff with Scorpius calms down, so her and Dominique are stuck together as bitchy Weasley girls for a while.

Scor and Elodie once loved each other, but now fight and fight and cause each other so much pain that in end they realise it isn't worth it, and after the slight burst of euphoria/adrenalin at the other's pain, they just feel bad because they desire each other/are attracted to one another.

Thanks for your lovely comments and for reading and reviewing! :D

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