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Review:Tonks1247 says:
Hello!

This was a pretty amazing piece. Not exactly what I expected when I clicked on it, but very bittersweet and well written! I have to say though, there was a lot of dialouge. I know it's hard not to have a lot of dialouge in a piece like this...But yeah. I also have a more nitpicky thing.

"Never again would he look at her, never again will he hold her, never would she be able to tell him all the things she never had the chance to say." *Will should be would, as you started the sentence in past tense.

Other than my bit of nitpicking, I really did like this story! I like how you have Lily as kind of the misfit of the family and have her leave the family...It really made this a bittersweet story. Also, You had no idea she was talking to her father's grave until towards the end, which was beautifully done. I also love the fact that Lily left a lily on his grave. Very fitting! Great story!

~Grimmerz

Author's Response: There are bound to be a few typo's that I've missed. Thanks for pointing it out :)

Thanks for your reviewing. I really enjoyed writing this story and developing Lily's character. It was also quite an emotional piece to get my head around and I'm glad the emotion came through.


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