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Review:Woodrow Rynne says:
This was really powerful writing! It was short, yes, but I think that only added to the horror that I felt. I've a feeling that you wrote this with Bellatrix in mind, partially because she is the only female death-eater I remember, and partially because you truly depicted how mad, cruel and ruthless she is.

The way you described how the victim finally went mad, was so interesting and well-written. Especially this line- Happy memories flooded through her mind but left through a growing black hole, which sucked in anything that made her life her own. Loved it.

A few errors I spotted though-

though it was nothing compared to the bleak situation inside. Two women were inside;
You have used the word 'inside' twice in quick succession- it sounds very redundant.

Two women were inside; one was stood tall- 'One stood tall', right?

Anyway, I loved your writing- it has the perfect amount of description, the idea was great as well. Great work!

P.S.- Was this the one-shot you wanted to enter in my challenge? (unnamed) If so, it fits perfectly. :) If you'd like, I can add you to my list of takers. Please do let me know, though. :)

Author's Response: Thanks again for the review!

I guess it has to be Bellatrix really, the only other one that I remember is Alecto Carrow, and this doesn't fit her character that well.

Thank you! That sentence, it's funny because I remember how stuck I got on that paragraph! :P

Thank you for telling me the errors! I can go back and edit them soon. I didn't notice I'd used the word 'inside' twice, especially so close together.

Thanks again! I'm glad that you enjoyed reading it (I think?)!

+I've added a link in the challenge thread, I totally forgot that I hadn't posted in there! :)

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