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Review:Woodrow Rynne says:
Aww...this was so, so heart-breaking. Sob. I've read stories about the Weasley family after Fred's death, but I've never read a fic about how Angelina coped with the loss, so this was really new for me. Also, I don't really read song-fics, but you wrote this so perfectly! The song fit in wonderfully; I loved it, really. :)

I think you deserve a 10/10 for characterisation! Angelina's pain was so descriptive and real, and written in such a believable way that I'm awed. :'( And I loved the fact that you invented that detail- that she was engaged to Fred- how heart-wrenching!

In short, I could really feel for her, and her pain, so full points on that! :D

However, a few mistakes I spotted-

Her breathe caught as she was suddenly still- should be breath.

looking down at the engagement ring, which felt heavier then normal.
heavier 'than'.

Other than that, this was a fab song-fic, and I loved, loved it! :D

Great job!
Vanya

Author's Response: Hello :)

I'm really happy you liked this story. I fell in love with this song when it first came out and after listening to it enough times over while reading different stories, I decided it was time to put this song into a story. And that lead to Angelina, who I absolutely love to write! And of course I had to put more of a connection between Angie and Fred...just enough to make the song fit just a little bit more.

I will take a look at those two spots. I haven't edited this in a while [or much at all], so I'll take a look at it. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

~Grimmerz


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