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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
Hey there, So sorry for taking a bit long.

I think the story was very emotional and romantic. Every bit of the story fitted together like pieces of a puzzle.

In my opinion I think your flawless word choice gave a big impact on the story and how a reader would play the scene/s on their minds.

This line: "She was dancing with Lucius with her head on his chest. They moved together gracefully and slowly; they fit together perfectly. Lucius then, ever so slightly, kissed her hair." I found very sweet and a line I would probably never forget.

The way you described how Narcissa had power before Voldemort's death was really fantastic. It matched on what the readers would've expected from the books. Draco's character and him fleeing to Paris seemed a bit right since he is Draco after all.

I think you could've improved by filling the '10-month-gap' between Lucius and Narcissa by explaining how she or he felt during that time. Yes, it would be hard but as I said its just a suggestion feel free to ignore it :)

Overall, you did such an amazing work and the story was very mesmerizing.

10,10 for this one,
CloakAuror9 xx

Author's Response: Aww thank you so much for such a sweet and flattering review :) I am glad you found this emotional and romantic, and you think it all fit. It's nice to hear that! I am positively thrilled that you find my word-choice "flawless", thanks a lot!!
I actually added that particular line/part later after an edit, and I'm glad it touched you!!
Good to know that the characterizations fitted as well.
As for filling the 10-month gap, I'm not too sure about it, but I'll see what I can do.

Thanks a lot for your kind review! I cherish the 10/10 and your comments :)


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