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Review:blueirony says:
I don't believe in Cupid or 'greater forces' in any form of any part of life. But I have left that aside while I read this and I found this really adorable and endearing.

Ron/Hermione has been done to death. But never like this. Your idea is original and fresh and that is why I really like this. You have taken a story that we all know inside out and turned it into something new. That's really clever. And I loved how you had us look at their relationship from an onlooker's point of view. It was a different way of viewing it but, again, a refreshing one and you did really well.

I think you had both Ron and Hermione's characterisation spot on which is interesting since you had them both from another person's POV. But you did well with both of them. You also did well with Amatis and Cariad. I found some of their interactions funny but always heartfelt and I really loved the way they interacted with each other throughout the story.

Your flow was well done and pace was good, however I think you did try to pack a lot into this. I don't think that you should try and break it up into a few chapters because it works brilliantly as a one-shot, but you could perhaps try and expand on it a little bit more? I know it's hard, particularly given from whose POV you are writing, but there is room for expansion and I think that would round this off perfectly.

This is really well done despite that, though. It's new, it's interesting and just fluffy enough to make my heart melt. You did well!

I don't know what else to say! I normally can go on for ages in a review but this was just really lovely and I can't think of anything else to compliment you on other to say that this is just a really sweet story that I am definitely going to re-read every now and then. It's exactly the type of story that you would want to read after having a bad day or while you're stressed and I really did love reading it.

Great writing!

Joop.

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you for your lovely review, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. And thanks for suspending your disbelief - although I guess we need to do that for pretty much everything in the Potterverse:-)

I love Ron and Hermione, and I was so pleased to draw their kiss for the 're-write a scene challenge'. Thinking of a new way to do it was very difficult, and it's great to know I came up with something fresh and original.

I'm very proud of Amatis and Cariad. They were lots of fun to write, and I'm glad the dynamic between them works. I'm pleased that you think there is enough here to expand, and I think that the way I will do this is possibly to revisit them as characters in the future. I can see them having a pretty tough time with Cho, and also maybe Ginny.

It's lovely to know you might come back and read again.

Thanks once more for taking the time to provide such a thorough and helpful review!



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