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Review:Houlestar says:
Interesting ending. I think that you should have included the reconciliation because this chapter really feels disjointed from the rest. It also would have been good to show how they get to America, since it all feels really rushed right now, and kind of out of the blue.
Overall, it's been a really good story, with lots of interesting bits, but I think that it could have definitely been fleshed out to make a really good whole. Still, good stuff in here.
Thanks!
-Houlestar

Author's Response: I'm sorry you find the chapter disjointed, though at least you think it was interesting. I did write this with the intention that the reader would feel that everything isn't quite resolved, and maybe that came across as things being rushed. This is simply the direction that my muse took me in at the point at which I was writing this story.

Thanks for all of your awesome reviews! I appreciate you taking the time to read the whole story.

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