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Review:Livi_777 says:
Hi! I'm here for the BvB review battle (Go team Blue!). Firstly, I adore your idea. It's a really lovely one!! I'm the most valiant Romione shipper around so I love this story, it's so adorable, and I love the way you present it, with all the key moments in their relationship. It's a really sweet story.
Two things that I think you could perhaps improve on a bit would be the individuality of your technique, and the format of your story. Firstly, I love this story, and the idea is so wonderfully unique, but I think that you could make the way you write a bit more original. Maybe include some good descriptions occasionally, and think about similie and metaphor etc. That would just add another dimension to the story and make it perfect!
The second thing, which isn't so much to do with faults in your writing, because I love it, but more to do with how you could have layed this out a little better. As I said before, I adore your ideas and the way you've written this, but I think that cramming it all into a one-shot took away some of it's potential. I think that you could make this truly amazing by simply extending it, providing a more continuous, flowing narrative and more details and humour. I think that you could prevent the story seeming to jump around a bit and make it all come together perfectly by dividing it into five or six chapters and including some more scenes and perhaps some snapshots of the cupids other cases. Cho and Cedric perhaps? Or Harry and Ginny?
Otherwise, I love this story and I think you've done an absolutely fantastic job, well done!

Author's Response: Hello! I'm so glad you enjoyed my story. I had a lot of fun writing it.

I'm so pleased you think there is enough material here to warrant a longer story. I think I'm happy with this as a one shot, but I am very attached to Amatis and Cariad, and I like the idea of maybe building them out in other short stories. I would love to write them again. That's certainly something for me to think about!

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