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Review:Hogwartsishome says:
It's a good chapter first of all! Ginny I must admit is characterised quite well and Hermione's reaction to Ron cheating on her is also quite good I think.

However I did get a little confused with the speech, may I suggest seperating each new line of speech with a space to make for easier reading?

Also I think everything is slightly sudden. Lavender being pregnant and Hermione suddenly being taken home by Draco, in my opinion it needs more depth and the reader needs to know more about Draco and Hermione's relationship if you get me as it's been quite a while since they finished Hogwarts and so things have probably changed? Obviously the reader is given a hint as to how Draco has transformed but I as a reader kind of need more at this point.

But overall it's a good chapter and your story is getting better as it goes on so far! :D

Author's Response: I loved the little Ginny fit there...super fun to write...speech...I will fix that,I promise:D I will also slows things down from here on out! Thanks for the help!

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