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Review:hpgrl says:
Hi, this is blue.knight from the review tag.

So, I really liked how this story took a completely different perspective that we don't often see. The writing itself was well done- I do think, however, that you could have detailed Talen's feelings towards the middle a bit more. So when he first storms out, be a little more clear; you could say something like 'and he thought to himself, not again' (or 'not now/not here'). That way it won't be such an abrupt change, but it won't give away too much right away. I loved the premise of this story and sincerely wish there was more to it. To me, it reads more like the first chapter of a really amazing novel, than a one-shot. I don't feel like I got closure with Talen. It would be so cool if we he got a fake identity, or something like that, and snuck into Hogwarts and maybe confronted his parents? or saved his new village? Sorry, I'm getting ahead of myself. But great job! I don't often have this much to say about a story, but your story did that for me :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review!
I was actually considering turning this into a longer story but I really don't have time at the moment with more of my stories. I actually like the fact that it's a one shot because it does leave people guessing.

Thank you for all of your comments and your review though :D

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