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Review:Hogwarts27 says:
Nice battle scene, and another of my favorite chapters of this story. You really packed a lot of action into the short space of this chapter. I especially liked the part where Chris just yells 'STOP' and the clone is paralyzed. It gave me the impression that Chris must be very powerful, unless there was something else unseen at work that did that.

Thanks for sharing the tip about making a list of story titles. I like that idea, and I'm a fan of making lists anyway. For my own story I made lists of character names, plant names, creature names - so maybe I'll have to add story title names to my list collection to help fuel the creative juices!

And here's a tip I can share with you. The most useful writing tip I ever got (from an internet writing forum) was that good writers "show" a story rather than "tell" it. One of the published authors shared a simple tip on the forum that I've been mindful of ever since, so maybe you will find it useful too. The author's tip was that it's often good to construct sentences using simple past tense verb forms. For example, the first two sentences below are narrative descriptions that simply tell the action, whereas the last sentence shows it happening in front of the reader's eyes:

John was running and letting out a cry.
John had run and had let out a cry.
John ran and let out a cry.

So watch for places in your own writing where simply changing the verb form might create improvement. This one little tip about verbs was the thing that improved my own writing immensely, so I'm happy to pass it along to other writers.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the awesome words of encouragement, your opinion means so much to me and is very helpful.
I'm pleased that you enjoyed the battle scene, I tried to fit in a lot of the action in a small space and I'm pleased that I seem to have succeeded. Chris is the one that stopped time and paralyzed the clone, he's very powerful. Though he will still need to go through some form of training to enable him to control that and any other powers that he has. He is what I like to call the next stage in the evolutionary cycle of the wizarding world, with new powers that manifest themselves. It was this time stopping ability that T.E.C.H. detected and decided to find Chris. T.E.C.H. had already done a fair bit of research into who he was and what he was capable of doing, hence why they knew his name and one or two other things about him. The epilogue has been posted and is awaiting validation. I would love to read your much valued opinions on that and the entire story (as a whole) when it's published.
Thanks for the tips on making individual lists for various things concerning each story, that will come in very handy. And also the verb tip, I'll try and take that on board. But sometimes where my writing is concerned, while I'm writing I can forget some of the advice that I receive. If that happens, please don't think that I ignored you completely.
T.E.C.H. part two is currantly being written and I hope to have the first part (the prologue) up and posted when the epilogue of my currant story is validated. There's a short basic summary of what it's about at the end of the epilogue of part one. Please do tell me if it sounds interesting or not.
Many thanks for once again stopping by and leaving a few much valued comments. I hope you enjoy the rest of this story, and any other stories of this type that I post. Happy reading.

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