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Review:AC_rules says:
Oh HELLLO tension, plot and drama. I'll admit that I knew about the whole Marlene/Regulus relationship going on here because I was stalking all your reviews (because I obviously have no life) but othewise I think it would have been a great big shocking thing - which is good. Shock is good. But maybe go back to the first two chapters and add a couple of subtle suggestions about Marlene having her heart broken or something? Because shock is great, but its even more great when you're SHOCKED and then you think HUH, that was there ALL along.

I love Mary having a sister. Thats so good, and the whole drama there is really very interesting. I haven't read anything quite like that, the nearest sort of dynamic is the whole Sirius/Regulus thing. HEY, if you got Mary and Sirius together then they would be like rival couples with their siblings. It would be like with twins when you have the evil one... only it would be DOUBLEY as cool. Sirius/Mary forever. Ahem.

Anyway, your writing was good in this chapter too and I like how Marlene doesn't suddenly forget that she doesn't even like Mary when she's comforting her - thats good, people who drop everything and all grudges aren't very believable. Anyway, still really enjoying it. Hopefully I'll be back soon for more reviewing goodness (only one more chapter left!)

-AC

Author's Response: Whoa...have you been on the coffee Helen??!! :P Thanks for the amazing and very hyper review!
Yep I am going to add in oh lovely subtle hints about Regulus, and maybe tone down the sudden burst of heartbroken-ness and seriousness that Marlene suddenly suffers.
I like the bit with Mary too though :D

Ahem. Who is this creepy review stalker who is obsessed with mary/Sirius?

And that reminds me I need to hook Mary up with someone...maybe your dreams will be fulfilled!!

Thanks hun

xxx


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