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Review:academica says:
Hey! I've come around at last with your second review :)

I liked this little look we got at Pansy. I did always kind of wonder how she reacted to Draco's mission and whether it marked the beginning of the demise of their relationship.

Two things occurred to me while reading this. One is that your characterization seems a little shallow, though I can definitely see Pansy feeling that she and Draco are both perfect. Maybe it's just my distaste for overly optimistic depictions of Draco speaking there. The other is that I wish this had been a bit longer! It would have been interesting to see Draco unravel Pansy's perfect little plan with his news and his utter disregard for matters not related to his mission.

I did love the bit at the end about the ink stain. You would definitely expect bookish Hermione Granger to end up like that, not Pansy, who surely has minions to do her work for her. It was a neat look into the nuances of her personality, and maybe that's what I thought could have added to the characterization here.

Nice job! :)

academica

Author's Response: Hey!

Well, I actually wanted her characterization to be 'shallow', that's how I wrote it. About it being longer, well if I had extended it, I wouldn't have been able to keep everything Unnamed (haha). Maybe I'll do an extension once the challenge is complete!

I am glad you liked that ink stains part, and overall the personality.

Thanks a lot for your review!!

Cheers!
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