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Review:Cassius Alcinder says:
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So seeing as how I actually read the entire story a couple months ago and neglected to leave reviews, I definetly owe you one:)

First of all, what an original plot! I loved how you managed to create your own very unique OC and seemlessy weave her into the canon information we know about the Marauders. I especially have to commend you for being able to adapt they story when JK threw you a curveball with the whole Prince's tale thing. That obviously interefered with how the story seemed to be going, but you managed to play it off really well. Although it was a bit darker than JK's writing style, I could definetley see this filling in some of the gaps in our canon knowledge, and fitting perfectly into what we know of the era. Although the end was very sad, it definetely had to be that way because you just can't give snape a happy ending and have it fit his character. Most of all, I really enjoyed reading the depcitions of the beginning of the first wizarding war, and how well you captured the confusion and violence of the times.

Characterization was excellent as well. Snape has to be one of the most challenges characters to write as he is so complex and layered, and I think you nailed him perfectly. I also really enjoyed your depiction of the marauders, you showed just enough of their fun loving antics while mostly focusing on the serious back drop of the looming war, something I feel that is missing in most marauder era fics. the OC's were very interesting as well, Grimm was such a great character, and Sejanus was interesting and layered. nd obviously Emma was a very complex MC with a lot of depth to her. I have to say of the many "Lily's best friend OC's," she's the first one I've seen that didn't seem really cliched and wasn't solely there to be paired off with Sirius or Remus.

I think another thing that really made this story were the descriptions of the settings, it really created the aura of mystery around the events. Btw, the chapter with the estate on the moor I was totally thinking about Hound of the Baskervilles, and then you mentioned something about a hound and I thought that was awesome.

Great job on an amazing story!

Author's Response: Many apologies for taking so long to respond - it's a fantastic review and I'm very thankful that you took the time to not only read this very long (and rather pondering) story, but also that you left such a detailed review. I do have a general dislike of this story, so responding to reviews for it is difficult because I often can't understand how anyone could enjoy it. However, having someone of your calibre be complimentary to it makes me second-guess my dislike. It's perfectionism that plagues me and nothing more. ;)

Anyway, first know that your review has left me with a loss of words. Not many people actually mention the characterization of Snape, not that I can remember at least, so hearing that he was well-written in this story is wonderful news - the problem I had was in making him show emotion without actually showing it, if that makes sense. He's the kind of character who is brimming with feeling, but has forced himself to repress it utterly, even to the point that Voldemort can't "see" his "true" feelings, which is very impressive. But it also makes Snape a strange character to write, and maybe that's why many writers have trouble writing him. At times in this story, he feels very distant, while at others, he is anything but, and I worried that it made him too erratic, so to hear the opposite is fabulous.

I'm also very glad to hear that Emma's characterization was successful. She teetered on the edge of Mary Sue for most of this story, mostly because she was my first OC, but also because, like you said, the Lily's friend cliche, or even just a female OC in the Marauder Era cliche threatened disaster. It helped to take the characters out of Hogwarts and let them "grow up" on their own terms - that was where Girmm's death became a turning point for Emma, and for me, she became a more interesting character (for me, at least).

That scene on the moor was heavily inspired by the "Hound of the Baskervilles" - it's one of my favourite Holmes stories because of the atmosphere. The same plot and characters without the moor couldn't be as captivating and terrifying. The moor is a wonderful setting for Voldemort - all doom and gloom, rather like the Riddle Mansion in GoF.

Thank you again for your review! I can't fully express how fantastic it is! :)

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