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Review:xXJamesandLilyXx says:
First, things you did right:

It's a really interesting viewpoint you chose, and you characterised Helena as an interesting and multi-faceted person: her guilt, how difficult it was for her to love, how she felt overshadowed. You really developed her as a character, which is unusual in one-shots, but very good all the same.

It was also really great how you put her POV into the conversation with Harry, and thought of how something completely different must have been going on in her head as opposed to what she was saying.

There were only a couple of little things in this one-shot I wasn't so sure about...

I think the character of Voldemort could have been a little less informal, even though he was a teenager. I also think you could have maybe made him more of a dominant person, and emphasised how she may have been a little apprehensive or fearful of him.

Overall, I loved this story and think you're a really great writer. You created a compelling twist for a minor but influential character, great job :)

Author's Response: Oh, man, first review for Helena.

I tried to really think about what she was thinking. I mean, there was obviously a backstory that Jo doesn't explain. Being a ghost, she has to have had a lot of experiances that were good and bad.

In her conversation with Harry, I had already written out what Helena's character was, and when I wrote the conversation with Harry, I just stuck to her character, which was that she was...well, really guilty and reluctant to trust people in general.

Writing Voldemort, even as a teenager, was difficult. How do you write someone so evil and heartless? I didn't make him to dominant because when I read over Harry's conversation with Helena, she said that he had flattered her, and obviously not tried to force her to give him the information about the diadem.

Thanks for reviewing! It really makes my day =)


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