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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hello! I'm here for the final one! I'm so happy i have time today to fill in both your requests! This might be shorter, only because it's a short piece ;D

On with the review! So, i felt disgusted by this, only because the unlikeableness of Pansy. She really is terrible isn't she? I think though that you captured her well and it was easy to imagine her. I think your Pansy fits well with how she was in the books.

I think you have some nice details in the story which makes me believe more that this story happened at Hogwarts and not just some random boarding school

There were a couple things that i couldn't quite imagine, like the accessories by the mirror... people's personal accessories? school accessories? Did the girls come to the common room to do their makeup? If so, why didn't they use their bathrooms in their dormitories? I think some more distinct imagery there would have answered those questions.

Overall though, i think this is a decent piece and i feel like you captured Pansy well. There was one particular line i really liked the "looking into the mirror because there is nothing i like doing better" or something like that. Really captured her well, made me groan :D Also, something as mundane as putting on her lipgloss, usually i hate when authors describe everything their characters are doing while looking in the mirror. I have always felt like it was an uncreative way of decribing a character. BUT i felt like with Pansy, it worked perfectly and enhanced her characterization :D Great job.

Author's Response: Hey there!

Thanks a lot for your review :)

It's good to know that Pansy's unlikeableness came across well and it fitted, because that's what I was aiming for :) Also nice to hear that you got the "feel of Hogwarts"!
I got a few pointers on the accessories thing in other reviews too, so I think I'll go and edit that and elaborate more. I will definitely give more detail and imagery! Your comments are appreciated, thank you :)
I am flattered that you think I captured Pansy well and that you think the little bit about applying her make-up enhanced the character.

Thanks a lot for your kind review :)

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