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Review:Everlasting Faerie Light says:
Okay, you requested a review from me back in September or something...AND I'M SO SORRRYYY that I didn't review it sooner. Things have gotten in the way, but I'm starting my thread back up, so here's your review!

This story is beautifully written. You’ve managed to create an AU slash story that still manages to keep the characters in canon. Sirius is still Sirius and Remus still acts like Remus. The romantic scenes between Remus and Sirius are perfectly balanced, tender, and intense all at the same time. Your word choice makes the reader feel like they really are feeling the emotions that the characters are feeling. Another thing to note is the pace. The pace is absolutely perfect and it never drags out, nor is it to short. I absolutely love your use of imagery throughout the story...not only are your descriptions, but your usage sensory imagery. It's very impressive. Your syntax and writing flows beautifully. As for the storyling itself, I absolutely love it. The emotion of both Remus and Sirius losing James and Lily and then talking about keeping Harry is just heartbreaking because we all know what really happens. Another powerful aspect is how you make the two main characters rely on each other and find comfort each other in these dark times. The last image of your story with both Remus, Sirius, and Harry has that "in the moment" tone, where we all know that there is much more darkness and tears to come, but right now it doesn't matter. I love those sorts of scenes! Your grammar is generally good, although there are a few typos here and there, but it doesn't detract from the story. All in all, this is a fantastic and powerful fic. Well done.

Author's Response: That's okay. I can understand RL getting in the way and I can never blame you for that.

The hard thing about AU and slash is how not-canon it is. I still love to keep canon elements and I'm glad that came across here. Characterization is important to me. Remus and Sirius are some of my favorite characters that writing them is like second-nature. I always imagined them to have a somewhat explosive relationship at times, with Sirius's anger and Remus seems like the type of person who bottles things up until he's ready to explode.

I don't want to comment on every single thing you've mentioned because I feel like I'm just going to keep repeating everything, but your comments have just blown me away. Thank you so much. I did have this beta'd recently so hopefully any typos you've noticed have been fixed now, sorry about that.

Thank you again. This was such a wonderful review that left me beaming. :D

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