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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
A happy ending! I don't know whether to be ecstatic that someone actually managed to write a Snivily that ended happily or suspicious that, at any moment, Voldemort's going to pop out and kill them both. There's still the potential for it, you know.

Haha, I didn't expect this ending, actually. It's funny because while it's beautiful and happy, I feel that the story isn't over. What were the consequences of Lily killing Sirius? What did the Death Eaters do? What did Voldemort do? If Snape and Lily remained in England that long, did anything happen to them, any more attacks? Or did Dumbledore do something to protect them once he heard of Sirius's death? Murder always seems to have its consequences in the Potterverse - even for the good characters, there is always a price. That's the only thing that I think you could have fleshed out further.

Otherwise, this chapter contains fantastic descriptions, very rich and Romantic with all the natural imagery and the idyllic setting. There's a softness to this chapter that I would not have thought possible in earlier chapters - Lily has finally known what it means to be happy, and I think it's wonderful that both of your characters are rewarded with this kind of ending. The suffering is over and they can move on, far away from the war between Voldemort and the Order, not that they can ever fully escape that war, but in this scene, they do.

What I like is that in this chapter, you've written fluff in a pleasing way. The language flows and the details of the setting pull the reader right in. Usually, I feel resistance to fluff, but here, not at all because of how you wrote it. The characters are so natural together - they're like two sides of the same coin. *sigh* It's very romantic. ^_^

Congratulations on finishing this story! It's been wonderful to follow the characters through your alternate universe! I look forward to whatever new story you have up your sleeve. :D

Author's Response: You know, I think that's just it -- Voldemort could very well pop out and kill them both at any second. The Death Eaters could show up on their doorstep looking for revenge. Mundungus Fletcher could turn around and sell them out. It's a very calm, pleasant scene, but I did want the reader to realize that the mood is still tense, that it could all be ripped away. I even thought maybe the reader would imagine what could happen for themselves, and maybe I could have made that more obvious. Thanks!

I'm glad you like my fluff -- I realize the story was paced a little quick toward the end, and I'll probably write more of them in the future (now that I know I can actually execute it!). I tried to package it up in nice imagery and, as I mentioned in my last response, make the reader want a happy ending for the two of them, at least a happy ending for right now.

Thank you so much for all of your wonderful reviews -- they are one of the reasons that I love to work on new pieces and publish them. I promise I'll be by to catch up on the reviews I owe you soon! Over break, if not earlier :)

Amanda


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