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Review:leannemariesnape says:
This was a short and sweet little one-shot. I really enjoyed it- a bit of fluff now and then is a very good thing for the soul! I thought that you got off to a strong start with this, and did a good job of showing where and when we were seeing Harry. The first little thing that struck me however, was when Harry welled up at the thought of seeing Dobby. Whilst Harry is a very emotional young man, in my personal opinion he wouldn't be upset to the point of tears over Dobby, though I would imagine him feeling very sad. This isn't really a major issue, though.

Another thing that struck me is the thought of Ginny driving. I don't know why but I never really imagined Ginny to be someone to drive. Harry, of course, but the image of Ginny driving is a very strange thing to me. Though again, this is just my mind. It didn't affect the quality, nor did it affect the plot of the story. I'm just being crazy. I really liked the dialogue that you gave Ginny however. She was very frantic, and also relaxed. We could see it was the same person we knew from the books, but at the same time, it was obvious that having children had matured her and also her speaking patterns which I really enjoyed.

I feel like I'm being picky with this next point. I wasn't keen on introducing Hermione as Ron's wife. Hermione was just as close to Harry as Ron was, so that felt a little awkward to me. (Again, personal opinion, though).

But those letters! They were so short and sweet! I loved them. Perfectly in character for the age, and also just so adorable! Especially Ron's last letter. It was a very Ron-ish thing to write, and it is obvious that he cares about Harry, but is too Ron-ish to actually say it. So cute!

The spelling was perfect, and the grammar was good- I didn't spot anything, but I'm awful when it comes to grammar anyway, so what do I know!? I think that some of thes sentences were a little bit long, but I think that is just something that can be improved over time, without giving much thought to it.

I hope this review was somewhat useful. It's such a cute little story!

Leanne x

Author's Response: Ahh thanks so much. Really glad that my characterisation was good, I really wanted to get it right in this as it's so short and also nex gen. I'm also glad that you did mention the points about Ginny driving and Harry being over-emotional because it's nice to hear your reaction to everything. Glad you thought the letters were good, as they make up a bit part of the story.
Thanks for reviewing :)
-Lizzfizz


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