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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hi, i'm here for our swap! :D

I'm so glad i read this, it is so different from what i've ever read before. I rarely ever read Draco stories and I think you did a lovely job at capturing their relationship. I really loved that you gave it more depth and dimension. I really felt like they actually were really complex and i think you captured Draco perfectly. I was really annoyed at him for being so cold and blunt. But that's him and it was easy to pity him, he didn't know how to love or what it was. It just seemed like she was his toy.

I also really liked how much depth you gave Pansy, i was fighting it a little bit at the beginning because i have my own predispositions about her but you convinced me that your Pansy was real and living, so wonderful job with her! I also liked how she had a bit of hope in the end like there was life outside of this relationship and it was a good thing he came back at the end. It gave her the closure that he wasnt' meant for her. I liked the one flashback with her saying 'save it' it had a lovely spark to it and I feel like it characterized her well.

The only thing that i was a little hesitent on was when she was conceding that perhaps if she was honest with herself that she knew this day would come. I felt like that came too sudden and didn't fit in with the rest of the story before where she was so surprised by it. I would have have liked a better transition or, at least, a hint of it before.

Otherwise though, you have a great piece of work here! Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it. I think I wanted this to be different from what people normally see on the forums. And I really wanted to capture both of them, especially Pansy, and give them real emotions and some actual depth. We're hinted at some depth with Draco in the series, but not so much with Pansy. And I know people tend to hate her, and that J.K. Rowling herself thinks Pansy is a terrible person, but I think because of that I like to give her some credit.

I'm really glad that you think I captured Draco so well, and that he annoyed you, as he's kind of supposed to. We, as readers, like happy endings and this isn't one. I'm also glad you gave in a little bit to Pansy. I didn't want the story to be completely depressing though, I guess, so I did make the point to give her some hope in the end. It kind of made me want to write a follow-up of her moving on, but I don't know yet. And originally, I didn't intend for him to return, the idea just sort of popped in my head part way through writing and I wrote out the scene and edited it a lot and managed to fit it in there. I think you're right that it was necessary though in order to give Pansy closure.

I will look into the bit your hesitant about. Might even edit the story. It's been about a month since I posted it, I guess it's probably time to go back and give it a look over. Honestly, I think even while writing it I wasn't sure how people would react to her saying that, that she knew the day would come. I think I will work on it.

Thank you so much for the review though! It kind of made my day. I've really enjoyed all the feedback I've gotten for this story and I'm really proud of it. I am in the middle of reading your story and will have written a review for it later today.


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