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Review:classicblack says:
Hey it's me with your review!

Can I just say wow? This is one of the most original ideas that I've seen in a while. I don't think I've ever read or seen a story with this plot. Top marks for creativity! The introduction of this story was most definitely extremely attention-getting and managed to bring in the reader almost immediately. So far, I think you've got an extremely good plot. If you can keep it up, I can see this story becoming a tremendous success.

Daphne seems to me a strong-willed and independent young woman who, although she may not realise it yet, can have the courage and ability to do anything she chooses. Callum on the other hand, seems a bit too perfect to be real, if you know what I mean. This leads me to mistrust him a bit. I don't know if you were going for that, but if so, well done because it really was done quite subtley.

The word choice really inhanced the readabilty because it wasn't a level that was too high for most readers. Good choice on that!

One thing that struck me as odd was Daphne's headaches and pain. I know it was a side effect of her magic, but as Harry never experienced anything of the sort and there's no clue in any of the books that any other wizard experienced it, I'm not so sure about it. Despite that, as we've also never had a character whose magic was not recognised on time, it could very well be highly realistic. The pain of the palms reminded me of the book/ movie 'I Am Number 4'.

You've got an exceptional story so far and it was extremely fun to read and review it. If you want another request, I'd love to review again.

Happy writing,
classicblack from the forums

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much for the quick response and OH MY GOD! this is an amazing review! I love love love it!
I'm so relieved and pleased that you think this story can be a success! I'm glad it has potential :)

I'm glad Daphne came across exactly as I wanted, I wrestled so much with her personality. :) as for Callum I don't want to give too much away but lets just say I'm pleased with what you feel about his character! :)

Yes, I know the headaches are odd but I wanted to include it to give Daphne incentive to feel intimidated and wary from the powers she has. I just included it by my own will thinking it culd be a nice quirk to the kids who are over 11 when they show signs of magic.

Thank you so much for the great review! I'll be back for more for sure :) :)


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