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Review:thelovinspoonful says:
I think you accidentally cut out a big chunk of story in this chapter. But if I understand right, the surprise was that everyone was being resorted for some indefinite amount of time and Ginny was put into Slytherin? But why are the 'major' Slytherin characters still in Slytherin? The expectation would be that some of them would have been changed or chose to change as well. It sounds like a unique twist, but it would be much easier to follow with the explanation of how the switch is working.

Grammar wise, the most disconcerting mistakes are the capitalization issues (don't forget that the Burrow is a distinct place - the name of the Weasley's home!), homophones (to, too; their, there, they're; etc), and possessive/plural mistakes (Ron's ball is a ball belonging to Ron and noted with an apostrophe. The Weasleys are made up of 7 people and are therefore plural.). The only other consistant issue was dialogue format. There were (again) some capitalization issues, but there were also formatting errors and basic dialogue grammar errors. If a spoken line is followed with a he said/she muttered/whatever indicating the speaker spoke, the last sentence should be punctuated with a comma inside the quotations (unless it's a question, in which case a question mark is acceptable). Ex: "The cat was black," he said. If the line following the spoken bit is a complete sentence and unrelated to who spoke the dialogue, you can punctuate with a period inside the quotation marks. "The cat ran out in front of me." John threw his hands in the air.

To help sort out confusion over who is speaking and who is responding in some of these paragraphs, you might re-read and put actions that belong to a different character in thier own paragraph. I'm going to try to give you an example, because I know that is a very vague sounding trick.
"Well, I guess I just don't understand then."
Susie flipped her hair in Mary's face. "I suppose not." She smiled cruelly.
Mary turned her eyes down, unable to find anything else to say.
"Buhbye, now," Susie said, flaunting past Mary with one last triumphant hair flip.
Mary smiled as Susie tripped over the foot she'd stuck into Susie's path.

I think you've got a good start going. If you need any help or have any questions over the critique, feel free to pm me on the forums - my name is the same as my pen name.

Author's Response: Oh wow I am astonished by this comment. I know my grammar is not great and i have some small plot holes. I'm both ecstatic and annoyed that you noticed them:p I love that you aren't just scanning the story but actually looking deeper into it. I started writing this story in 8th grade and now I am a senior and to be honest I truly wish I could go back and edit all of the chapters and fix all of my mistakes but i don't have the patience or the time. I've gone through 3 betas with this story, the first two stopped being betas after my first ten chapters and the third one just never did anything. If you are interested in maybe being a beta for me, let me know. I would love to have someone go through and help correct my grammar mistakes. I know there are a lot. Thank you for this review:D

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