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Review:classicblack says:
Hey it's me with your review!

First off, let me just say that I love this idea! It's so creative and I've never read anything like it! You did a spectacular job of bringing out two characters from canon who are little known and giving them a story of their own that fits with the events going on in canon at this time!

With that out of the way, I don't think this is abrupt at all. I actually think that it flowed rather nicely. You gave us the information that Hannah had said yes to Justin and then you described the Yule Ball in a way that perfectly fits Eloise's character. In addition, you gave a flashback about a dress that fit with the Yule Ball theme of this chapter. It's been great through these four chapters to be able to see how Eloise developes into this girl that, I think now, actually respects herself.

I also liked how you made Hannah and Neville be together at the Yule Ball- foreshadowing for the fact that they get married later down the road. In addition, in previous chapters, I liked how you included the Chamber of Secrets pretrifying aspect with Justin and his fear of snakes, hahaha. You did a great job of incorporating canon/ information that JKR has given us through interviews in your story.

You've done a spectacular job with this story and I enjoyed reviewing it. Well done!

Happy writing (your last chapter!),
classicblack from the forums

Author's Response: Hey! :)

Aweee! Thank you! I love little known characters! They are so fun to write, aren't they? :)

You don't? Well, I'm so glad. :) Yess, Eloise has definitely grown, though, not that much. But at least she's starting to see that maybe she's not that bad, after all. :)

Haha. Justin shall ever be terrified of snakes from now on. Who wouldn't? He may love magical creatures, but he can't ever love snakes again. :P

Thank you for such kind comments! :D

Cheers!
Vanya.

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