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Review:Cassius Alcinder says:
Back for Chapter 2!

This was a very interesting chapter that moved the plot forward very nicely. So far the story seems to be moving at just the right pace; there's a lot of developments, but you are adequately explaining them.

I enjoyed Salazar's introduction; he seems dark and mysterious, exactly how you would picture a typical slytherin.

The dialogue continues to be excellent and totally believable within the context of the era. The medieval fear of witchcraft was a very real thing and you have captured that very well. Your description of Scotland and how English people would view it as a mysterious unsettled place seemed totally accurate as well and fitting with the biases of the time (like in Braveheart).

This story has loads of potential, and i definetely enjoyed reading it so far. Feel free to re-request!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you think the pace is working, I know I have a habit of moving things along too fast once I get past the introduction.

Salazar, in particular, is going to be quite a different character to how he was portrayed in canon. Without giving too much away, there was some twisting of the facts in the early days of Hogwarts, meaning the established canon is quite different to what actually happened. However Salazar definitely does have a lot of the traditional Slytherin traits - the best lies always have an element of truth, after all.

Once again, I'm really pleased you think it's historically accurate. Coming from New Zealand, this is an unfamiliar era and country to me, and I've never studied it formally either. So to get confirmation that I'm doing it right really is comforting.

Thank you for the review, and I certainly intend to re-request once I have a few more chapters up :)


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