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Review:Cassius Alcinder says:
It's me from the forums here with your review!

This is actually the first founders's era story I've read, and I think its off to a relaly good start. You had some excellent descritions that really created the feel of the time and place and created a sense of mystery and foreboding.

As far as characterization, we don't really know a whole lot aside from the basic traits we associate with the houses, so I think you should have a lot of room to work with. Rowena seems totally believable so far.

I saw you were concerned with historical accuracy, luckily I'm a history major. Probably the biggest mistake people make with historical pieces is mentioning technologies or slang phrases that did not exist in that era, which you obviously did not do. I personally woulnd't nit pick over little things like "you said henry IV was king but it was actually Henry V" or things like that, and i doubt most people would either. You used a high level of vocabularly and dialogue that seemed to fit the era well, and you effectively captured attitudes that seem common for people of the time, particularly the fear of witches and magic.

You did a really good job of starting the action right away and leaving us wondering where she is fleeing to and what she might find. Great start, and I would definetely keep reading.

Author's Response: It's actually surprising how many people have said this is the first Founders they've read! I suppose it's flattering that a number of people are willing to read something they wouldn't normally read.

I'm really glad I've pulled off the setting well. It's my first time writing Founders and it's quite different to what I'd normally write, so I'm definitely pleased you think I've got it right. Especially as you're a history major, that confirmation really means a lot :)

Thanks for the review!


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