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Review:apocalypse says:
Hey, this is apocalypse, here with your review!

First up, I have to tell you that I love reading angst. I like to write it too but I'm not as good at it as you are =) So really good job. I love sad endings =P

Overall, the story was definitely brilliant. It was a good idea and I liked how you chose to write the story from Narcissa's point of view. I loved how you shaped her character. She still had bits and pieces of her strong character but I could see that the war had affected her too, just like it had affected everyone else.

Lucius' character, according to me, didn't have much in this story. There was only slight detail which I would have liked to be more. It would have been nicer of you'd mentioned the memories that Narcissa's craved so much. I would've liked to see his better side; it would've had a more sad impact of his death. I think that if we look at his character regardless of the story, it needs more work. However, when you look at the bigger picture and do not look at it deeply, it fits. =)

The paragraph where you described the condition of Narcissa's family? That was awesome. Simply loved it =) People write huge novels on the after effects of a war on a particular family but you achieved the same effect in one paragraph. Brilliant job!

The angst level was not that high but it worked for you. =) And apart from what I mentioned I didn't find anything majorly wrong with this story. It was very well-written and well thought of. A very good effort =D

Thankyou so much for requesting! I hope my review helped you =) Goodluck and Happy Writing! =)

Author's Response: Hi there!!

Thanks a lot for reading & reviewing!

I love Angst too - both reading and writing! And that comment about not being as good as me flatters me, thank you :)

I am glad you found this overall good, liked Narcissa's character and the description on her family and stuff.

About Lucius's character, well actually I wanted to solely focus my narrative on Narcissa so I didn't go into much detail about Lucius. I'll see what I can do about the memories; thank you for your comments!

I don't write extremely heavy angst so I think this was fine; glad to know you liked it :)

Thanks a ton!


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