Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:javct says:
javct45 from the forums with your review!
First off, this story was nice :) You portrayed the emotion very well and your description was really good.

However, there were a few grammatical errors throughout the story (especially when the Elf was talking) and, as great as your story was, I honestly think that characterisation of Narcissa was a little off. I get that it is after the war and everyone is battered and bruised, I still think that Narcissa would hold herself regal and composed on the outside (while on the inside she was feeling like everyone else) but that's just me. I loved Lucuis's character when he had lost it all and when he was just about to die.

Very emotional story, but very good :) 8/10

Author's Response: Hi!! Thank you for your helpful review! I am glad you liked the story nd the emotion overall. I will do a re-read and go through the grammatical errors.
In my opinion though, I think despite Narcissa being strong and composed all the time, the war would have broken her down just like it did many. Everyone think differently though, and I appreciate your feedback!
I am happy you liked Lucius' character :)
Thanks a lot for reading & reviewing!


Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 623
Submit Report: