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Review:LionsRule says:
Hey there! LionsRule here from the forums with your requested review! ^_^

The first thing I noticed was that this story was very original. I’ve never seen a take on a Ron/Hermione like this, so I thought it was excellent that you added your own twist on the story. I know you were supposed to rewrite the scene, but you really though outside-of-the-box with Amatis and Cariad picking the couples. So good job with your originality! :D

I also loved the characters you created. Amatis and Cariad are absolutely hilarious, and their funny banter really made me want to keep reading. I also loved how you added them into scenes from the books. Adding an extra twist onto some of my favorite HP scenes really made the story very original while also familiar at the same time.

I would also like to compliment you on your sentence flow, word choice, grammar, and punctuation. Your story flowed really well, and that made it even nicer to read. You picked really good words and the dialogue was seamless. Your story was virtually free of any technical errors.

Your story is so original, and what I love is that it might of actually happened. You stuck to the book very well, and you added the cupids into the perfect scenes. I honestly couldn’t find ANYTHING to critique on. So congrats on such an excellent story!

I would recommend getting a banner for your story, though. It will definitely help draw in more readers and get more attention for this awesome story. You can go make an account over at the-dark-arts and request a banner; they’re always excellent in making story graphics.

Bravo! Feel free to request another review for any other stories you might want reviewed. I will definitely be adding this story to my favorites and I would love to see more of your work in the future. ^_^

-Jacqueline

Author's Response: Aw - thanks so much! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it! It's always great to get good feedback, and this really did make my day. I'm very proud of this story, and it's nice to know I did a good job.

Thanks for the idea about the banner, I hadn't really thought about it before. I shall check out TDA and see what I can do

Sophie x

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