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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
Hello there!

Your characterisation is fantastic! Although I can only observe so much with so little facts to base the characters. It was really hard to think how Minerva looked when she was young so a suggestion is to describe how she looks like or something like that. There's also Tom, normally he would be paired up with Bellatrix or something like that.

For your description, I think it was really great although it could be improved with more characterisation in it?

The pace is something I can't judge for now since its just the first chapter and this isn't a one-shot but as far as I'm aware it's very steady even when you have that flashback things.

The flow was great! Although this minor detail in the story bothered me:

There were no chefs, or maids, or waitresses bustling in the kitchen in their daily attempt to wake their masters up.

Shouldn't it have been elves because they were in Hogwarts? So that bit just confuses and nothing else.

Overall great job! 9/10,
CloakAuror9 xx

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for this. I didn't even pick that up, I'll put in the next chapter somewhere what she looked like :) and as for that minor detail, the students of Hogwarts had been evacuated to the countryside (like everyone else) because of the advancing war.
Thanks :) x


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