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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hey there! It's DarkRose from the forums, here with a review your requested a month and a half ago... :P I'm so sorry I'm epically slow. I've been really busy...

Anywayyy: here's the review!

I loved the story. I really did. I hope you did well in the challenge. The characterization of both Teddy and Victoire was perfect. They were so sweet and consistently well-written. I loved all of Teddy's inner thoughts. Adorable.

Spectacular job with the descriptions. All the pastries and flowers you mentioned while he was in Diagon Alley were wonderful. I definitely felt like I was in the scene. The only place where things fell flat, sadly, was when he actually proposed to her. I thought there would be more of a lead-in, more suspense, maybe he'd tell her all the reasons he loved her first...something. And then just...she walked in and he popped the question. It was a bit anticlimactic. :/

Other than that, though, everything was great. The plot flowed smoothly and things all fit together very nicely. I liked how you progressed from one thing to another. Really well done. :]

Overall, I think this was a very sweet story and I think you did very well writing it. Great job!

--Emily

Author's Response: Aw, no problem - I totally understand. :)

I can understand what you mean about the proposal being a bit anticlimactic. I'll go through and see about expanding it a bit. :)

Thanks for the review!


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